Saturday, 09 February 2008

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  • anonymous
    Beauty – Inside I am a kid I am beautiful not just outside but also inside I am a kid Not tall but not short I am happy about my right height I am a kid and I never lie I am beautiful of my honesty, right? I am a kid and I care about other kids I comfort them whenever they sigh I am a kid and I love playing with other children I am of peace and would never fight I am a kid and I love my parents I kiss them whenever they sigh Beauty of inside is more important than outside Love, care and honesty – I will put them in my heart high!
  • read_blog_write_thought

    @Shelby Ho - Can you write it again with appropriate punctuation?   One more suggestion, can you add some devices of poem in it? e.g. rhyming, simile, metaphor.......

  • anonymous

    Food-Marshmallow

    Fluffy marshmallow

    You like the cloud out of the window

    Flying freely in the airflow

    Could you tell me where you want to go?

    Colourful marshmallow

    You sometimes yellow

    Sometimes blue

    Sometimes like a pink globule

    Marshmallow,marshmallow

    You as fluffy as a pillow

    You as colourful as a rainbow

    I realy love you,marshmallow.

  • read_blog_write_thought

    @@janiceLaw - good poem.  Is it your final entry?

  • anonymous

    @read_blog_write_thought - Are there any mistakes in my poem?

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